The phone was ringing. Cliff was sitting in the hall on the straw chair that was never meant for sitting on. He was covered from head to toe in my blood and needed a bath.
I turned my head to look out the living room window. I could see the sun rising over our neighbor's house. The morning light illuminated my distorted body on the hardwood floor.
I turned back to watch Cliff again. "Someone should get the phone," I said.
He looked at me for the first time in hours. A single tear slipped down his face. He nodded and walked to the kitchen.
"Hello... Yes... OK... Good-Bye."
He reentered the hallway with his jacket on. "I have to go to work," he said.
"Don't forget to wash up."
"Ok."
"Do you want pork chops tonight?"
"Yes, that would be nice."
After he left, I lay in a pool of my own blood wondering how I was going to clean up this mess.
Date Written: July 2, 2005 Author:Klause Muppet Average Vote: 2.875
Comments:
07/14/2005Will Disney: what - wait. i'm going to figure out where all that blood came from!
07/14/2005The Rid: So did the tear go unnoticed by Cliff? The narrator certainly noticed it.
07/14/2005anonymous: Unnoticed by Cliff.
07/14/2005The Rid: Yeah. Clumsy.
07/14/2005qualcomm (3):
07/14/2005Mr. Pony (3.5): I didn't notice it. Maybe that's what the narrator meant.
07/14/2005The Rid (2): The nonchalance of the whole thing I find off-putting, and the scenario I find uninteresting.
07/14/2005Klause Muppet: The poor poor woman. Good thing times have changed.
07/14/2005anonymous: Rid-baby, I was aware of the "unnoticed" so it wasn't "clumsy". Perhaps you meant "unclear"?
07/14/2005The Rid: Just because you're aware of the "unnoticed" doesn't make it "clear." You're the writer, for Christ's sake; I hope you know the tear is there. The narrator is aware but Cliff is not, making it clumsy. And for that matter, unclear. So you're half right.
07/14/2005TheBuyer: author, the rid is right he's just being a jackass about it. the whole tear thing in it's entirety is out of place and doesn't work for this here reader.
07/14/2005qualcomm: i thought "unnoticed" was a bit clumsy but it was completely obvious what the writer's intention was.
07/14/2005qualcomm: i have a much bigger problem with "light broke through the glass"
07/14/2005The Rid: qualcomm, nice observation. I hadn't realized how awkward that phrasing was until now.
07/14/2005The Rid: Thanks, Buyer. I can always count on you to take the leap to "cunty."